Zoe Ladner review
I really liked it visually - especially Dan's piece. Though I feel like
the dialogue that was used didn't always feel natural with the artsy-ness
of the film. And I was a little disappointed with the new beginning
dialogue of Bacci's film, seemed a bit clichéd - and I thought that was a
big point that clashed with the awesome visuals.
Also - as much as I loved how Dan's looked - it was strange cause it was the
only one that had a really really different look to it - where you
definitely could see that it was a different director.
The order was interesting, I think in my mind I stick by my order just
because the Queen was the reason she was running and freaking out, but I
can also see why you chose to put it at the end. [Current running order is Tweedles; Tea Party; Caterpillar; Cheshire man; Q of H… Zoe’s script had Cheshire Man; Q of H; Tea Party; Caterpillar; Tweedles]
Of course, as I think you even told me that it’s scary to see what happens
to your work - and of course I was a little disappointed with certain lines
being taken out and certain new ones being added.... but considering a
whole different style was in my head I guess there was really no other
way. I envisioned it more mocking itself and it coming out more humorous
- there was no way I could have envisioned what they did visually - I
loved the opening and closing scenes.
I don't mind what Trevor did because I felt more like I was organizing his
thoughts for him - and I knew my dialogue wasn't very gangster-esque but I
sort of figured that would work itself out. The only conversations I
really was set on were the Tea Party - which was close enough to make me
happy plus just awesome with the improvisation.... and the Caterpillar....
which didn't come out the way I had envisioned and a lot of my favorite
parts I think were taken out or just different. Da da da da da...
Overall I liked it as itself, but feel my script didn't quite flow the way
I had hoped.
Anyhow, dinner time
Z
